Urban Strife - turn-based zombie survival RPG

[Lokiamis]

Here's a sample of writing you'll see in the first 2 minutes of the game.

 

[Fargus]

lol wtf

 

[Parsimonious cook]

Ah man... I had some hope for this... oh well...

 

[GrafvonMoltke]

Ah man... I had some hope for this... oh well...

Idk if the barometer for being shit is unproofread English then what can I tell you? Codex is a very post-modern enterprise with lots of snowflakes.

The game will be fine.

 

[Eyestabber]

Doesn't seem very woke. Mechanics will make or break this one.

 

[Harthwain]

I see someone is a big fan of Scarlett Johansson/Black Widow. They really should cut off some of the text though.

Here is my take:

Kaylee: You got yourself in a nasty accident over here. Are you all right?

John Doe: Everything is blurry. I... don't remember much.

Kaylee: We need to get off this bridge ASAP! The zombies are coming. Follow me!

Later you can explain she helped you, because having extra hands to fight the zombies (and do other stuff) is useful or something like that. Otherwise her behavior doesn't make much sense.

And that's just me cutting off the fat and leaving the original dialogue intact. The golden rule of writing is: keep it short and to the point.

Also, the summary is a mess format-wise:

• Text is too bunched together, making it feel like a wall of text. I suggest adding some more spacing both between the lines and between the words.
• Text is not aligned (justified) for some reason. It looks horrible, especially on something that's supposed to be an official document (it's fine for the "written notes" style, by the way).

 

[Strange Fellow]

The fact that standard for niche indie RPG Devs is to use Body Type/Third Gender: Space Wreck, Encased, Urban Strife etc, and all BIGGER&BIG CUCKS in industry are giving pronoun selection: Solasta, Baldur's Gate 3, Starfield is fucking insane. WHAT THE FUCK IS IN THE WATER?

Wow you really did earn both of those dumbfuck tags huh

*rolleyez* *55COVIDboosterslater* *takestrannycockoutofmouth* AGH! You guyz and your silly invisible culture wars! Can't you just be NORMAL person, and I'dunno, just consooom?!

 

[Acrux]

This is still the old demo, right? The updated one will be available in a few days.

They got a lot of feedback on the awkward writing before. Maybe it will be updated in the new one.

 

[luj1]

reading reports from dexers that the writing is subpar
thoughts?

It's not subpar, it's crap. But perfect for you considering you are a fan of Fallout 4, Fallout 76, Skyrim and Oblivion.

 

[rusty_shackleford]

reading reports from dexers that the writing is subpar
thoughts?

It's not subpar, it's crap. But perfect for you considering you are a fan of Fallout 4, Fallout 76, Skyrim and Oblivion.

excuse me, I do not like fallout 4

 

[luj1]

Doesn't matter what you like, you are a shit eater. Your standards are well known around here and your question was retarded. This game is advertised as the spiritual successor to JA2. Therefore writing is not the focus, nor has bad writing ever been an obstacle for you.

 

[luj1]

Ah man... I had some hope for this... oh well...

Hope for what? You don't play ToEE or JA2 for the writing. This is a combatfag game.

 

[Tyranicon]

Does it force you to actually read or can you just skip past everything and not lose much?

If a game forces you to actually read the text and it sounds like it was written by a dog or a zoomer, that's a hard pass.

 

[Alienman]

Doesn't matter what you like, you are a shit eater. Your standards are well known around here and your question was retarded. This game is advertised as the spiritual successor to JA2. Therefore writing is not the focus, nor has bad writing ever been an obstacle for you.

Ehm, the writing is pretty good in JA2. It's actually one of the things that made the game so memorable, more than the combat that is.

 

[Alienman]

Does it force you to actually read or can you just skip past everything and not lose much?

If a game forces you to actually read the text and it sounds like it was written by a dog or a zoomer, that's a hard pass.

I assume you got to read stuff if I want to know anything about the story. The game is supposed to borrow from Dead State after all.

 

[The Wall]

Anyone who thinks good RPGs make themselves is wrong. Broz let's help these guyz make best JA2 with zombies ever, or even isometric-tactical Fallout: New Vegas in zombie post-apocalypse. About writing: WHY don't you contact Chris Avellone? After you're done laughing, tell me why there isn't your message inside his inbox. Serious question. Dude is Shakespeare of Video Games, and got cancelled over.....nobody really knows what. He's dirt cheap because of it, costs as much as Thai hoe. Do you have balls and courage to ask Chris out? USG_Mucifikatorul

 

[Fargus]

You can say what you will about Dead State but the writing was entertaining. Dialogues were pretty much classic Mitsoda, same humor and amusting insults.

 

[The Wall]

I got feeling that reason why many indies don't ask out writers like Chris/Mitsoda to write for them is because EGO of local team's writer is on the way. You have Kingmaker Devs and many others who never offered Chris position of Lead Writer. Can you imagine some SJW thinking xer prose is better

 

[Infinitron]

Also, it's an RPG set in the modern day, so it's likely that at some point somebody on this forum will find a reason to call it woke. Be prepared.

Yep!

 

[Fargus]

I got feeling that reason why many indies don't ask out writers like Chris/Mitsoda to write for them is because EGO of local team's writer is on the way. You have Kingmaker Devs and many others who never offered Chris position of Lead Writer. Can you imagine some SJW thinking xer prose is better

One is a sad wreck of a man not sure if he even writes anymore and the other's reputation was completely destroyed and noone wants to be associated with him. Who would ask them to write anything at this point?

Funny enough the writing in modern rpgs is so shit and boring that i would sooner ask some patreon lewd vn monkey to write for an rpg. At least i know then it will be entertaining.

 

[Ryzer]

I got feeling that reason why many indies don't ask out writers like Chris/Mitsoda to write for them is because EGO of local team's writer is on the way. You have Kingmaker Devs and many others who never offered Chris position of Lead Writer. Can you imagine some SJW thinking xer prose is better

One is a sad wreck of a man not sure if he even writes anymore and the other's reputation was completely destroyed and noone wants to be associated with him. Who would ask them to write anything at this point?

Funny enough the writing in modern rpgs is so shit and boring that i would sooner ask some patreon lewd vn monkey to write for an rpg. At least i know then it will be entertaining.

Or you can simply ask ChatGPT to produce more interesting dialogues.

 

[Acrux]

Does it force you to actually read or can you just skip past everything and not lose much?

If a game forces you to actually read the text and it sounds like it was written by a dog or a zoomer, that's a hard pass.

I assume you got to read stuff if I want to know anything about the story. The game is supposed to borrow from Dead State after all.

It looks like there is going to be some kind of overhaul.

RPG has gone through a new overhaul round, dialogues are now less stuffed; you can still read the lore, but you can do it at will, after you settle in

 

[Edgetard]

Doesn't seem very woke. Mechanics will make or break this one.

Nah bad writing like this leads to woke writing down the line. It'll probably be like dead state and thrust some freak on the lgbt spectrum on your squad

 

[Harthwain]

Nah bad writing like this leads to woke writing down the line. It'll probably be like dead state and thrust some freak on the lgbt spectrum on your squad

The nickname checks out.

 

[luj1]

the writing is pretty good in JA2. It's actually one of the things that made the game so memorable, more than the combat that is.

All Renaissance titles had good writing because they were developed before educational and cultural decline became full throttle. But you don't play JA2 or Urban Strife because of the writing. The tactical combat in this game is excellent, but it is going to need a few patches.